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I Was Reminded by ~fieldy:iconfieldy:

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As we lay there quiet
I was reminded of all the reasons why I lust you
Your smile,
and the way it teased at me seductively
Your laugh,
and the way it tempted me
Your eyes,
and the way they seem to hypnotize me

As we sat there silent
I was reminded of all the reasons why I love you
Your smile,
and the way it brings such life into me
Your laugh,
and the way it makes everything okay
Your eyes,
and the way them seems to read my thoughts

As we stand here now
I am reminded of all the reasons why I hate you
Your smile,
and the way it confuses me
Your laugh,
and the way it seems to mock me
Your eyes,
and the way they can look into mine and not feel a thing
©2003-2010 ~fieldy
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Author's Comments

Just something I wrote a long time ago, about someone who was very special to me.

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~smearedxstars Nov 19, 2003, 8:55:04 AM
WOW! If i knew how to do the little picture/animation of the addition sign and the star I would put that in but I dont know how to do that so i'm going to actually hit the 'fav.' button when i get done making this comment. I wanted to let ya know though, that this poem is definitely one of the best I think you've ever written if i am qualified enough to say such a thing. and oh my god, it was amazing, i liked the end and the way it twisted around. major major major kudos!

Katelyn

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Katelyn
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~fieldy Nov 23, 2003, 3:06:48 AM
Thanks babe. I liked how it came out myself. I usually hate how I write, but this one was okay in my eyes.

I wrote it about the first person I wanted to spend my life with. It's childish I know, but it was how I felt.

Anyways thanks for the kind words and the fav too!

- Adam
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~gypsyend0rphin Dec 2, 2003, 6:39:55 AM
I was looking through your gallery and WOW.. what can I say! This is beautiful, the structure is very interesting and I like the way you do not limit yourself by constricting rhyming.. :+fav:
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~fieldy Dec 10, 2003, 2:58:59 AM
Thank you for the kind words.

What I love most about my writing is that it's all from the Heart.

:)
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~smearedxstars Jan 5, 2004, 7:13:25 AM
I know I've already commented on thisp oem once before but every time I read it I fall in love it with more and more. I know what you mean, I've felt like that before and...it's such an aweful feeling. Arg, I worship the paper you write on!! Because....I don't know, if it was actually possible to marry an inanimate object i believe that I would marry this poem.

Katelyn

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Katelyn
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~fieldy Jan 5, 2004, 6:27:17 PM
Well thank you for the comments, it's nice to know someone appreciates what I do... :D

I dont know if it's actually possible to marry a piece of paper, but maybe you could convice me to let you date it for a while. There is the problem of being in other countries.. :P

Once again, thanks babe for the kind words.. I just write from my heart, even though the things I was writing about then seem like a distant memory. Things are much much better for me now.. :D
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~WindBurned Apr 19, 2004, 5:44:42 PM
im really impressed with ur writing!! keep it up

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"Art does not depict exactly what the artist sees, but it is a picture of the psyche of the artist as he perceives the world around him." -Tim Hinck
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~nocturnalrainbow Feb 16, 2007, 4:17:45 AM
hey adam, i love this one, all your work is awesome :)

shea.
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